2015年10月31日雅思写作范文
Task 1 A类小作文 线形图 作文题目：Land for organic crops Task 2 some people believe that many people who work for creative arts such as painting. theatre and music should be supported financially by government, others think that artists in creative arts should be supported by other sources instead. discuss both views and give your own opinion. 题型类别：双边讨论类 题材类别：政府类 大作文范文 The realization of basic human needs such as enough clothing and food makes it necessary for a more advanced spiritual enjoyment from art. For those who devote themselves to creating aesthetic works and pleasure, I think they should be supported by both government and other resources. The government, as the central power that can accumulate a wealth of resources and execute them more systematically, should take the main responsibility to fund the artists. Most of the museums and art galleries are run and managed by governments and artists can be financially supported if the government makes it more accessible for artists to have their works of art exhibited. The authority can also issue some policies or regulations favoring the creation of innovative works of art, such as the reduction of tax levied on the artists and more subsidies for the encouragement of their contribution. It is also true that the financial support from governments alone can hardly guarantee a decent pay or income for the artists. Funding from governments sometimes has to be allocated to the areas that are more concerned with the welfare of most of the citizens, such as health insurance and government loans for the students from disadvantaged families. In this case, the financial support from other sectors such as big companies or some non-governmental organisations can fit in. Some companies can carry out a series of exhibitions to raise more funds for artists and it is advisable for them to help publicise the works of artists on some media. To sum up, if joint efforts from both governments and other resources are made to fund those who are engaged in the field of arts, chances are that the artists will be better-off and create more valuable masterpieces that can elevate people's spiritual world. (Word count: 297) 猜你可能喜欢：
2021年10月30日雅思写作考试真题及范文
10月30日的雅思写作考试，有了新的知识点，快来一起看看吧。下面是我为大家整理的雅思2021年10月30日写作考试真题及范文，欢迎阅读。 2021年10月30日雅思阅读考试真题 真题分析 Nowadays， some parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. What are the reasons？ Is this a positive or negative development for children？ 该题问到的话题非常典型 - 父母对孩子的教育 - 这个话题属于母话题范畴，非常非常高频，所以黄老师推荐大家一定牢记范文好词好句。 首先，我们还是在看范文之前分析一下该题型，对于这道题有几点需要注意： 1.该题属于双问题型话题，对于该类话题同学们两个问题都必须用至少一段中间段来回答，切忌不要只在开头结尾回答某个问题！ 2.第一个问题的reasons有复数，所以同学们务必记住要写至少2个原因（原理可以参加黄老师上期视频 - 剑桥考官解析雅思大作文分段），而第二个问题没有复数，可以只写一个好处/坏处。 3.范文中用到了一个俚语‘helicopter parent’，该词组表示对于孩子过度保护的父母，也就是巨婴的父母。对于这类俚语同学们必须确保是在英文中广泛使用的，并且不属于专业术语。否则慎用。 p.s. 需要去年+今年《雅思大作文真题范文&词汇合辑》的同学们记得找黄老师免费领取哦！ 那么，接下来我们来看范文吧！（所有范文均有黄老师从英文期刊中摘抄好词好句写出，绝非中式英文） 满分词汇/高分段落 Nowadays， some parents put a lot of pressure on their children to succeed. What are the reasons？ Is this a positive or negative development for children？ 满分词汇： pour all of their energy into v. 倾注所有能量 great start in life n. 赢在人生的起跑线上 live through v. 介入…的生活 pay off v. 回报 envision v. 预期 unique insight n. 独特的见解 helicopter parent n. ‘巨婴型’父母 better grades n. 更好的成绩 extracurricular activities’ awards n. 课外奖项 resourcefulness n. 八面玲珑 开头段： There is no manual for parenting. Every parent does their best to work it out as each day passes. They pour all of their energy into providing a better life for their child and want to know that their best is enough to get their child off to a great start in life. 原因段： It is undeniable that parents live through their children and also make a sheer amount of sacrifice for their children， which means they want them to pay off. For many parents， the most desirable compensation is not momentary； instead， it is their kids ‘achievement. In addition， parents often envision their children to have a better life than they did， so they set big goals for them. 好处段： Parents know what is best for their child because they have a unique insight into the needs， tendencies， and desires of the child based on their instincts and experiences with them. This dynamic creates a distinct perspective that is impossible to be replicated by anyone else and puts the parents in the best position to guide the child into becoming a well-achieved adult. 坏处段： Dominance over kids ‘future sometimes poses overwhelming pressure on them and lead to helicopter parent culture. although it delivers immediate results such as better grades and extracurricular activities’ awards， it may hinder the qualities most needed for entrepreneurship and more generally， for success in adulthood - adaptability， resourcefulness and creativity. 雅思写作考试评分标准 一、大作文评分标准 考官将从以下方面对作文进行评分： • 对写作任务的反应：考生能否完整地、以恰当的方式完成题目中提出的写作任务；考生的论点是否切中题目的要求、论证过程是否完整、论点是否得到了论据的支持；考生的观点是否清晰和有效； • 连贯性和结构层次：考生能否将信息和要点进行组织（如运用分段的能力）、信息和要点之间的联系是否清晰； • 词汇来源：考生使用的词汇是否广泛、准确、且适合这一部分写作的要求； • 语法的多样性和准确性：考生使用的语法结构是否多样、准确、且适合这一部分写作的要求。 二、小作文评分标准 1. Task Achievement （写作任务完成情况） 这一项评分标准中考生主要满足两个要求：①作文整体结构清晰，容易看出写作思路 ② 能够清晰阐述主要趋势、概括比较核心信息。在这一项评分标准中考生尤为要注意的是，切不可直白陈述图中已有的信息，这样很容易写成流水账。需要去努力做到的是：变着法的去比较归纳！ 2. Coherence and Cohesion （连贯与衔接） 在这一项评分标准中，考生需要做到合理运用衔接手段，贯穿全文。一定要注意的是在下笔写作文前就可以把作文的思路和段落关系定下来，确定好衔接词。这么做的好处是，很容易让阅卷人在看到每段的开头就能明白你的作文思路，没有阅读障碍。 3. Lexical Resources （词汇丰富程度） 在这一项评分标准中，考生需要灵活使用丰富的词汇，但是需要注意的是，不仅仅是词汇要丰富，更加要做到一义多表达，即表达同一个意思可以整篇文章不重复相同的结构。 4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy （语法多样性及准确性） 在多样性这一块，考生需要注意的是不要整篇作文都是简单的主谓宾或主系表结构的句子，要写一些定语从句、名词性从句、非谓语等句式，体现多样性。 其次在准确性这一方面，要注意标点、单复数、时态、词性等语法错误，这些小错误堆积起来会拉低整体分数。 考生最容易忽视的是标点错误，但其实标点错误一旦出现，句子的结构会受到很大影响，甚至是断句有误，其造成的失分会比词性、单复数要多得多。
